Yoyoyoyoyoyo Jacaraaaa
Your story to me seems to say that it's cool to be polite to some people but then rude again. I don't know if this is what your trying to portray but this is what I got. I thought that your character was kind of rude which is not like my character who is actually a good person. I did like the beginning where she was nice to the elderly lady rather than taking the seat.
Maxie Pad (I haven't called you that in forever)
I like how you used piercing as the plot of your story. Right now there's a lot of that going on and I enjoy how you make a point to embarrass the person that thinks they're "cool". I think your story is about kids who think it's cool to be bad and such and I like how your calling them out. Good job!
Honey bunch, sugar plum, pumpyumpyunkin...
I like how you start with a fake representation (according to me) of cool and then continue on to an actually cool person (again according to me). Your story enlightens me (= D). I think that this should be how everyone is in real life because well rounded people are better than ones who think they're "cool".
Hi hero,
I liked how you pointed out that this was not your idea of cool because if it was I don't think you would be able to be my hero anymore. I enjoy your story line and the anticipation it built to get to the result. Your story is what most people think is cool I suppose because I know a lot of people that would do that.
Sam
I enjoyed the simplicity of your story and how it ended so nicely and simple. Your protaganist is the perfect example of what people think it's like too be cool.
In all the stories I kind of noticed that people had not really the same idea of being cool but they did have some similiarities. Kind of like it's cool to be a social and to want to be like everyone else. Like for Sam's story the protaginist changes himself to fit in with everyone else. Or in Jessica and Maxi's story the protaginists are social and like to be noticed. I think that this fits in to the characteristics of being cool.
I also noticed some differences like the fact that even though the protaginist in everyone's story have similarities they also have their own kind of personality. Like Sam's protaginist conforms while Jessica's chooses to instead turn away from friends and focus on herself instead. I think this is because everyone thinks different things about what it is to be cool. Which makes you think then that there can be no real "cool" person because even if one person thinks they are cool another can disagree.
Monday, November 23, 2009
OMG You're So Cool
She's hot. There's no denying it. Everything about her makes you want to die of jealousy. She has the best choice in clothes and shoes. Her looks are breathtaking. Her voice amazing. And she's not just one of those people who know they're hot and treat others like less than them. She actually helps her community, does petitions for things she believes in, is in all of the clubs you can possibly think of, and on top of that is a straight A student. She's the picture perfect daughter, an unbelievable role model to her younger siblings, and can pose on Playboy and still look angelic and perfect. She's everything I want to be and yet nothing I can be.
Monday, November 16, 2009
I'm The BOMB, I'm The BOMB, Uh Huhhhh
So what is being cool? Is it wearing nice clothes, or partying til the break of dawn? Is it doing all your homework or being nice to others? What makes others think that a person is cool? What do "cool" people think of being cool? Do they know they are cool? Do they care? Do some people take being cool too far? I think the concept of cool is very vague and undefined. There can be no clear definition because everyone has a different opinion on what cool can be.
Now there is a whole lot of "Oh I don't care what people think of me, I am who I am blah blah" nonsense and I think with some people this may be true to a certain extent but after a while you do begin to care about what people may think or say or do towards you. It's a normal feeling to not want to be an outcast. Though trying to be cool should not change who you are entirely.
I think being cool is also about having certain masks on when different people are around. A straight A student may be a jokester in class but gets all their homework done and does great in class. You wouldn't know because they act like someone different when they are in another kind of environment in this case school. If you can go through wearing a mask and being who everyone wants you to be at certain times then that may define you as cool to some people's standards. Either way it's not who you really are.
P.S. I don't think I'm going to like this unit.
Now there is a whole lot of "Oh I don't care what people think of me, I am who I am blah blah" nonsense and I think with some people this may be true to a certain extent but after a while you do begin to care about what people may think or say or do towards you. It's a normal feeling to not want to be an outcast. Though trying to be cool should not change who you are entirely.
I think being cool is also about having certain masks on when different people are around. A straight A student may be a jokester in class but gets all their homework done and does great in class. You wouldn't know because they act like someone different when they are in another kind of environment in this case school. If you can go through wearing a mask and being who everyone wants you to be at certain times then that may define you as cool to some people's standards. Either way it's not who you really are.
P.S. I don't think I'm going to like this unit.
Wednesday, November 11, 2009
The World As We Know It (Please let this be the final)
THE WORLD AS WE KNOW IT
Cellphones, computers, televisions, and ipods are a big part of our lives. Whether we want to admit or not most of us are addicted to some sort of digital stimulation. Now the real questions are why are we so addicted, who made us this way, and what will it be like for future generations. Throughout this paper we will be looking at evidence to try to gain some insight to these questions.
Argument 1:
On the train we see people constantly using their ipods. While they are walking down the street, they're texting. When kids get home from school, they turn on the tv to see what's on. People are constantly checking their facebook pages and emails. It's a non stop world of digital interaction out there and people have come to really depend on it. Although I have tried to figure out why we are so addicted before I still don't have every possible reason I think. I have talked about boredom, social status or awkwardness, and even being accustomed. But there might still be possibilities out there such as social acceptance, to show economical status, an escape from reality.
All of these are good topics to touch on. In the book Feed all of these topics are looked at. Such as boredom. Whenever the kids get bored they start watching stuff on their feed. Or with social status or awkwardness, Violet confesses to Titus that her parents never had feeds when they were younger and how people use to make them feel less of what they really were because they didn't have feeds. They got Violet a feed because they didn't want her to go through the hardships they went through without the feed. The kids being accustomed to the feed is shown when they disconnect them from the feed after the old guy causes them to malfunction. They are so used to it they don't know what to do when they don't have it. And when their friend Loga comes to visit and she still has it they all crowd around her, jealous that she still has her feed.
Social acceptance is kind of how Violet's parents get her a feed so that she is not made fun of in school or looked at differently than the rest of the kids. They give into the "feed". The economical status part is when we find out in the book that Violet couldn't afford a feed for a long time. So it shows us that there are still poor people in this world that can't afford the feed. If you do have the feed your obviously up in the financial class and your looked at differently than someone who isn't. The feed is also an escape from reality and they show us that all throughout the book. Like when Titus is upset and he just starts playing games on the feed to get away from thinking. Or when they are in the hospital and Loga is describing what's happening in that teen soap opera show and they are all so into it. Even the guys who usually don't watch it. They become so involved in the feed world that they don't even focus on what's going on in the real world.
Argument 2:
Now we can't blame being dependent on anyone really. No one put a gun to our head and said use this cellphone until your brain explodes. But maybe there are people that we should point the finger at. Such as our parents. My parents are always complaining about how much I'm on my cellphone but at the same time they pay for my bill and allow me to use it so what's the problem. Or how they say that we rarely spend any quality time together but when we are together the tv is on. Little things like this affect what I'm going to do with electronics.
I think we also put the electronics too much in little kid's faces. From such a young age we are teaching children how exciting new electronics are and how much we need them. For example, my 5 month old brother LOVES cellphones. I don't think he understands what they are but he likes the light and sounds it makes. My family encourages him playing with it by buying him a play phone or flashing their phone in front of him. We also just recently opened his walker and it has a play ipod on it that plays nursery rhymes which he loves. Things like this affect his development whether we believe it or not. When he gets older and starts to understand what they are we’re going to have even more of a problem trying to get him away from these devices. This has to be true with a lot of American children. I know and I was one of a lot of children I know that got their first cellphones before hitting double digits. Why do we need cellphones at such a young age?
This leads me to my next people I want to blame, the industries that make these things. They push and push their supplies until we fall into their traps. They make us think that the ipod that just came out is better than the one we have even though it works perfectly fine. Here is an example of companies doing this. Verizon is coming out with their own version of the iphone and just by the advertisement being this interesting I’m sure tons of people are going to go out and buy it. Here’s the link:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dPYM-XTqcec
The commercial is set to make people think that other phones don’t do everything that the “Droid” (name of their phone) does. But in reality who really needs all those things on their phone. We have computers for a reason. People however don’t think about this. They think they need to get this phone because the commercial showed them how much better this phone is then the one they have.
Last of all, I want to blame ourselves. We continue to give in every time they come out with something new. We buy it and then advertise it to our friends and family without ever really thinking about if it's really worth what we spent. We let ourselves be fooled by how good it looks on tv or how "cool" we would look if we had it. Companies know this so they play off of that.
Argument 3:
For the future (if there is one past 2012) what do you think the electronics are going to be like? How much more dependent are we going to be? Will the computers ever crash like they were once suppose to or will robots soon dominate our world? These are all good questions to think about and ponder.
When you think about future generations, at least personally I do not want to think about them with chips in the backs of their heads walking around knowing everything. I’d like to think that they will have at least a little bit of independence in them from electronics. I don’t know whether this is realistic though. Here’s an article I found where the author talks about how dependent we are:
http://www.pittsburghlive.com/x/pittsburghtrib/s_205232.html
She describes how it started and even gives a brief about how it might be. But she admits that she’s dependent and needs the technology.
If people of right now need it then just imagine those coming. Here’s a book called “The Engineer of 2020” by National Academy of Engineering. They discuss in this book how the world will be in 2020 with technology. Here are the attributes just to give you a summary:
-The pace of technological innovation will continue to be rapid (most likely accelerating).
-The world in which technology will be deployed will be intensely globally interconnected.
-The population of individuals who are involved with or affected by technology (e.g., designers, manufacturers, distributors, users) will be increasingly diverse and multidisciplinary.
-Social, cultural, political, and economic forces will continue to shape and affect the success of technological innovation.
-The presence of technology in our everyday lives will be seamless, transparent, and more significant than ever.
This is the summary of the book and it’s contents. Now I didn’t read the whole book but I skimmed through it and they are saying that the engineers are going to be the same but made more complex because of the impact technology will have.
I can’t imagine what it’s going to be like for future generations and how they will be with technology. Hopefully we can save the next couple of generations from technology frenzy by just rearranging out priorities with digital electronics.
Alternatives:
Now there are also those that say technology is the best thing that could have happened to us. It helps us develop our minds and the world. It’s a gift to communication between people. Without it we’d be lost. Things along that line. This website I found tells us the “9 rules for GOOD technology” (whatever that means):
http://www.masternewmedia.org/2004/04/04/nine_rules_for_good_technology.htm
They put things in our head to justify the way we use technology and maybe if we use
them like this we will be ok.
Conclusion:
Now that we have seen some evidence towards are questions why are we so addicted,
who did it to us, and what will it be like for the people to come we can make the
conclusion of whether or not technology is bad for us. This paper probably sounds bias saying that technology is bad for you but I don’t think it really is. I don’t think you need to cut digital things from your life just moderate how you use them or what you impose on others.
Works Cited
-“Feed” by M.T. Anderson
-http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dPYM-XTqcec
-http://www.pittsburghlive.com/x/pittsburghtrib/s_205232.html
-“The Engineer of 2020” by National Academy of Engineering
-http://www.masternewmedia.org/2004/04/04/nine_rules_for_good_technology.htm
Cellphones, computers, televisions, and ipods are a big part of our lives. Whether we want to admit or not most of us are addicted to some sort of digital stimulation. Now the real questions are why are we so addicted, who made us this way, and what will it be like for future generations. Throughout this paper we will be looking at evidence to try to gain some insight to these questions.
Argument 1:
On the train we see people constantly using their ipods. While they are walking down the street, they're texting. When kids get home from school, they turn on the tv to see what's on. People are constantly checking their facebook pages and emails. It's a non stop world of digital interaction out there and people have come to really depend on it. Although I have tried to figure out why we are so addicted before I still don't have every possible reason I think. I have talked about boredom, social status or awkwardness, and even being accustomed. But there might still be possibilities out there such as social acceptance, to show economical status, an escape from reality.
All of these are good topics to touch on. In the book Feed all of these topics are looked at. Such as boredom. Whenever the kids get bored they start watching stuff on their feed. Or with social status or awkwardness, Violet confesses to Titus that her parents never had feeds when they were younger and how people use to make them feel less of what they really were because they didn't have feeds. They got Violet a feed because they didn't want her to go through the hardships they went through without the feed. The kids being accustomed to the feed is shown when they disconnect them from the feed after the old guy causes them to malfunction. They are so used to it they don't know what to do when they don't have it. And when their friend Loga comes to visit and she still has it they all crowd around her, jealous that she still has her feed.
Social acceptance is kind of how Violet's parents get her a feed so that she is not made fun of in school or looked at differently than the rest of the kids. They give into the "feed". The economical status part is when we find out in the book that Violet couldn't afford a feed for a long time. So it shows us that there are still poor people in this world that can't afford the feed. If you do have the feed your obviously up in the financial class and your looked at differently than someone who isn't. The feed is also an escape from reality and they show us that all throughout the book. Like when Titus is upset and he just starts playing games on the feed to get away from thinking. Or when they are in the hospital and Loga is describing what's happening in that teen soap opera show and they are all so into it. Even the guys who usually don't watch it. They become so involved in the feed world that they don't even focus on what's going on in the real world.
Argument 2:
Now we can't blame being dependent on anyone really. No one put a gun to our head and said use this cellphone until your brain explodes. But maybe there are people that we should point the finger at. Such as our parents. My parents are always complaining about how much I'm on my cellphone but at the same time they pay for my bill and allow me to use it so what's the problem. Or how they say that we rarely spend any quality time together but when we are together the tv is on. Little things like this affect what I'm going to do with electronics.
I think we also put the electronics too much in little kid's faces. From such a young age we are teaching children how exciting new electronics are and how much we need them. For example, my 5 month old brother LOVES cellphones. I don't think he understands what they are but he likes the light and sounds it makes. My family encourages him playing with it by buying him a play phone or flashing their phone in front of him. We also just recently opened his walker and it has a play ipod on it that plays nursery rhymes which he loves. Things like this affect his development whether we believe it or not. When he gets older and starts to understand what they are we’re going to have even more of a problem trying to get him away from these devices. This has to be true with a lot of American children. I know and I was one of a lot of children I know that got their first cellphones before hitting double digits. Why do we need cellphones at such a young age?
This leads me to my next people I want to blame, the industries that make these things. They push and push their supplies until we fall into their traps. They make us think that the ipod that just came out is better than the one we have even though it works perfectly fine. Here is an example of companies doing this. Verizon is coming out with their own version of the iphone and just by the advertisement being this interesting I’m sure tons of people are going to go out and buy it. Here’s the link:
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dPYM-XTqcec
The commercial is set to make people think that other phones don’t do everything that the “Droid” (name of their phone) does. But in reality who really needs all those things on their phone. We have computers for a reason. People however don’t think about this. They think they need to get this phone because the commercial showed them how much better this phone is then the one they have.
Last of all, I want to blame ourselves. We continue to give in every time they come out with something new. We buy it and then advertise it to our friends and family without ever really thinking about if it's really worth what we spent. We let ourselves be fooled by how good it looks on tv or how "cool" we would look if we had it. Companies know this so they play off of that.
Argument 3:
For the future (if there is one past 2012) what do you think the electronics are going to be like? How much more dependent are we going to be? Will the computers ever crash like they were once suppose to or will robots soon dominate our world? These are all good questions to think about and ponder.
When you think about future generations, at least personally I do not want to think about them with chips in the backs of their heads walking around knowing everything. I’d like to think that they will have at least a little bit of independence in them from electronics. I don’t know whether this is realistic though. Here’s an article I found where the author talks about how dependent we are:
http://www.pittsburghlive.com/x/pittsburghtrib/s_205232.html
She describes how it started and even gives a brief about how it might be. But she admits that she’s dependent and needs the technology.
If people of right now need it then just imagine those coming. Here’s a book called “The Engineer of 2020” by National Academy of Engineering. They discuss in this book how the world will be in 2020 with technology. Here are the attributes just to give you a summary:
-The pace of technological innovation will continue to be rapid (most likely accelerating).
-The world in which technology will be deployed will be intensely globally interconnected.
-The population of individuals who are involved with or affected by technology (e.g., designers, manufacturers, distributors, users) will be increasingly diverse and multidisciplinary.
-Social, cultural, political, and economic forces will continue to shape and affect the success of technological innovation.
-The presence of technology in our everyday lives will be seamless, transparent, and more significant than ever.
This is the summary of the book and it’s contents. Now I didn’t read the whole book but I skimmed through it and they are saying that the engineers are going to be the same but made more complex because of the impact technology will have.
I can’t imagine what it’s going to be like for future generations and how they will be with technology. Hopefully we can save the next couple of generations from technology frenzy by just rearranging out priorities with digital electronics.
Alternatives:
Now there are also those that say technology is the best thing that could have happened to us. It helps us develop our minds and the world. It’s a gift to communication between people. Without it we’d be lost. Things along that line. This website I found tells us the “9 rules for GOOD technology” (whatever that means):
http://www.masternewmedia.org/2004/04/04/nine_rules_for_good_technology.htm
They put things in our head to justify the way we use technology and maybe if we use
them like this we will be ok.
Conclusion:
Now that we have seen some evidence towards are questions why are we so addicted,
who did it to us, and what will it be like for the people to come we can make the
conclusion of whether or not technology is bad for us. This paper probably sounds bias saying that technology is bad for you but I don’t think it really is. I don’t think you need to cut digital things from your life just moderate how you use them or what you impose on others.
Works Cited
-“Feed” by M.T. Anderson
-http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=dPYM-XTqcec
-http://www.pittsburghlive.com/x/pittsburghtrib/s_205232.html
-“The Engineer of 2020” by National Academy of Engineering
-http://www.masternewmedia.org/2004/04/04/nine_rules_for_good_technology.htm
The World As We Know It (Revised with captions)
THE WORLD AS WE KNOW IT
Cellphones, computers, televisions, and ipods are a big part of our lives. Whether we want to admit or not most of us are addicted to some sort of digital stimulation. Now the real questions are why are we so addicted, who made us this way, and what will it be like for future generations. Throughout this paper we will be looking at evidence to try to gain some insight to these questions.
Argument 1:
On the train we see people constantly using their ipods. While they are walking down the street, they're texting. When kids get home from school, they turn on the tv to see what's on. People are constantly checking their facebook pages and emails. It's a non stop world of digital interaction out there and people have come to really depend on it. Although I have tried to figure out why we are so addicted before I still don't have every possible reason I think. I have talked about boredom, social status or awkwardness, and even being accustomed. But there might still be possibilities out there such as social acceptance, to show economical status, an escape from reality.
All of these are good topics to touch on. In the book Feed all of these topics are looked at. Such as boredom. Whenever the kids get bored they start watching stuff on their feed. Or with social status or awkwardness, Violet confesses to Titus that her parents never had feeds when they were younger and how people use to make them feel less of what they really were because they didn't have feeds. They got Violet a feed because they didn't want her to go through the hardships they went through without the feed. The kids being accustomed to the feed is shown when they disconnect them from the feed after the old guy causes them to malfunction. They are so used to it they don't know what to do when they don't have it. And when their friend Loga comes to visit and she still has it they all crowd around her, jealous that she still has her feed.
Social acceptance is kind of how Violet's parents get her a feed so that she is not made fun of in school or looked at differently than the rest of the kids. They give into the "feed". The economical status part is when we find out in the book that Violet couldn't afford a feed for a long time. So it shows us that there are still poor people in this world that can't afford the feed. If you do have the feed your obviously up in the financial class and your looked at differently than someone who isn't. The feed is also an escape from reality and they show us that all throughtout the book. Like when Titus is upset and he just starts playing games on the feed to get away from thinking. Or when they are in the hospital and Loga is describing what's happening in that teen soap opera show and they are all so into it. Even the guys who usually don't watch it. They become so involved in the feed world that they don't even focus on what's going on in the real world. To be continued...
Argument 2:
Now we can't blame being dependent on anyone really. No one put a gun to our head and said use this cellphone until your brain explodes. But maybe there are people that we should point the finger at. Such as our parents. My parents are always complaining about how much I'm on my cellphone but at the same time they pay for my bill and allow me to use it so what's the problem. Or how they say that we rarely spend any quality time together but when we are together the tv is on. Little things like this affect what I'm going to do with electronics.
I think we also put the electronics too much in little kid's faces. For example, my 5 month old brother LOVES cellphones. I don't think he understands what they are but he likes the light and sounds it makes. My family encourages him playing with it by buying him a play phone or flashing their phone in front of him. We also just recently opened his walker and it has a play ipod on it that plays nursery rhymes which he loves.
This leads me to my next people I want to blame, the industries that make these things. They push and push their supplies until we fall into their traps. They make us think that the ipod that just came out is better than the one we have even though it works perfectly fine.
Last of all, I want to blame ourselves. We continue to give in everytime they come out with something new. We buy it and than advertise it to our friends and family without ever really thinking about if it's really worth what we spent. We let ourselves be fooled by how good it looks on tv or how "cool" we would look if we had it. To be continued...
Argument 3:
For the future (if there is one past 2012) what do you think the electronics are going to be like? How much more dependent are we going to be? Will the computers ever crash like they were once suppose to or will robots soon dominate our world? These are all good questions to think about and ponder. To be continued...
Works Cited
-Feed by M.T. Anderson (so far)
Cellphones, computers, televisions, and ipods are a big part of our lives. Whether we want to admit or not most of us are addicted to some sort of digital stimulation. Now the real questions are why are we so addicted, who made us this way, and what will it be like for future generations. Throughout this paper we will be looking at evidence to try to gain some insight to these questions.
Argument 1:
On the train we see people constantly using their ipods. While they are walking down the street, they're texting. When kids get home from school, they turn on the tv to see what's on. People are constantly checking their facebook pages and emails. It's a non stop world of digital interaction out there and people have come to really depend on it. Although I have tried to figure out why we are so addicted before I still don't have every possible reason I think. I have talked about boredom, social status or awkwardness, and even being accustomed. But there might still be possibilities out there such as social acceptance, to show economical status, an escape from reality.
All of these are good topics to touch on. In the book Feed all of these topics are looked at. Such as boredom. Whenever the kids get bored they start watching stuff on their feed. Or with social status or awkwardness, Violet confesses to Titus that her parents never had feeds when they were younger and how people use to make them feel less of what they really were because they didn't have feeds. They got Violet a feed because they didn't want her to go through the hardships they went through without the feed. The kids being accustomed to the feed is shown when they disconnect them from the feed after the old guy causes them to malfunction. They are so used to it they don't know what to do when they don't have it. And when their friend Loga comes to visit and she still has it they all crowd around her, jealous that she still has her feed.
Social acceptance is kind of how Violet's parents get her a feed so that she is not made fun of in school or looked at differently than the rest of the kids. They give into the "feed". The economical status part is when we find out in the book that Violet couldn't afford a feed for a long time. So it shows us that there are still poor people in this world that can't afford the feed. If you do have the feed your obviously up in the financial class and your looked at differently than someone who isn't. The feed is also an escape from reality and they show us that all throughtout the book. Like when Titus is upset and he just starts playing games on the feed to get away from thinking. Or when they are in the hospital and Loga is describing what's happening in that teen soap opera show and they are all so into it. Even the guys who usually don't watch it. They become so involved in the feed world that they don't even focus on what's going on in the real world. To be continued...
Argument 2:
Now we can't blame being dependent on anyone really. No one put a gun to our head and said use this cellphone until your brain explodes. But maybe there are people that we should point the finger at. Such as our parents. My parents are always complaining about how much I'm on my cellphone but at the same time they pay for my bill and allow me to use it so what's the problem. Or how they say that we rarely spend any quality time together but when we are together the tv is on. Little things like this affect what I'm going to do with electronics.
I think we also put the electronics too much in little kid's faces. For example, my 5 month old brother LOVES cellphones. I don't think he understands what they are but he likes the light and sounds it makes. My family encourages him playing with it by buying him a play phone or flashing their phone in front of him. We also just recently opened his walker and it has a play ipod on it that plays nursery rhymes which he loves.
This leads me to my next people I want to blame, the industries that make these things. They push and push their supplies until we fall into their traps. They make us think that the ipod that just came out is better than the one we have even though it works perfectly fine.
Last of all, I want to blame ourselves. We continue to give in everytime they come out with something new. We buy it and than advertise it to our friends and family without ever really thinking about if it's really worth what we spent. We let ourselves be fooled by how good it looks on tv or how "cool" we would look if we had it. To be continued...
Argument 3:
For the future (if there is one past 2012) what do you think the electronics are going to be like? How much more dependent are we going to be? Will the computers ever crash like they were once suppose to or will robots soon dominate our world? These are all good questions to think about and ponder. To be continued...
Works Cited
-Feed by M.T. Anderson (so far)
Wednesday, November 4, 2009
And Then Fix Your Rough Draft Cuz It's Ugly
Hey Chloe,
Your rough draft is very well written and you show a lot of strong points. I enjoy reading what you think about digitalization and it's affect on our community. I see a lot of strong examples in your paper and I like this. It seems to me your ideas broadened a whole lot within a couple of days. What I do think you should take a second look at is maybe talk about the alternative point of view to the situation such as keeping in touch with friends and family or how digitalization is helping technology grow therefore helping people. Other than that I think your paper is headed in a really good direction and I can't wait to read the final product : )
Hi Conor,
First of thanks for completing your rough draft. I think your thesis is clear and direct. I see your evidence and I know where your getting at but I think in the final paper you are going to need to expand a whole lot more. Using specific quotes may help. My other suggestion would be to communicate it back to what concerns you about our world feeding into this digital frenzy. Again I see where your going with your arguements but I think I need to see some more connecting it back to the world. You should also try analyzing your arguments a little more. Maybe seeking alternatives or sources that support your idea might help. That's all I can say. I'm out
Your rough draft is very well written and you show a lot of strong points. I enjoy reading what you think about digitalization and it's affect on our community. I see a lot of strong examples in your paper and I like this. It seems to me your ideas broadened a whole lot within a couple of days. What I do think you should take a second look at is maybe talk about the alternative point of view to the situation such as keeping in touch with friends and family or how digitalization is helping technology grow therefore helping people. Other than that I think your paper is headed in a really good direction and I can't wait to read the final product : )
Hi Conor,
First of thanks for completing your rough draft. I think your thesis is clear and direct. I see your evidence and I know where your getting at but I think in the final paper you are going to need to expand a whole lot more. Using specific quotes may help. My other suggestion would be to communicate it back to what concerns you about our world feeding into this digital frenzy. Again I see where your going with your arguements but I think I need to see some more connecting it back to the world. You should also try analyzing your arguments a little more. Maybe seeking alternatives or sources that support your idea might help. That's all I can say. I'm out
Tuesday, November 3, 2009
The World As We Know It (Rough Draft)
Cellphones, computers, televisions, and ipods are a big part of our lives. Whether we want to admit or not most of us are addicted to some sort of digital stimulation. Now the real questions are why are we so addicted, who made us this way, and what will it be like for future generations. Throughout this paper we will be looking at evidence to try to gain some insight to these questions.
On the train we see people constantly using their ipods. While they are walking down the street, they're texting. When kids get home from school, they turn on the tv to see what's on. People are constantly checking their facebook pages and emails. It's a non stop world of digital interaction out there and people have come to really depend on it. Although I have tried to figure out why we are so addicted before I still don't have every possible reason I think. I have talked about boredom, social status or awkwardness, and even being accustomed. But there might still be possibilities out there such as social acceptance, to show economical status, an escape from reality. All of these are good topics to touch on. In the book Feed all of these topics are looked at. Such as boredom. Whenever the kids get bored they start watching stuff on their feed. Or with social status or awkwardness, Violet confesses to Titus that her parents never had feeds when they were younger and how people use to make them feel less of what they really were because they didn't have feeds. They got Violet a feed because they didn't want her to go through the hardships they went through without the feed. The kids being accustomed to the feed is shown when they disconnect them from the feed after the old guy causes them to malfunction. They are so used to it they don't know what to do when they don't have it. And when their friend Loga comes to visit and she still has it they all crowd around her, jealous that she still has her feed. Social acceptance is kind of how Violet's parents get her a feed so that she is not made fun of in school or looked at differently than the rest of the kids. They give into the "feed". The economical status part is when we find out in the book that Violet couldn't afford a feed for a long time. So it shows us that there are still poor people in this world that can't afford the feed. If you do have the feed your obviously up in the financial class and your looked at differently than someone who isn't. The feed is also an escape from reality and they show us that all throughtout the book. Like when Titus is upset and he just starts playing games on the feed to get away from thinking. Or when they are in the hospital and Loga is describing what's happening in that teen soap opera show and they are all so into it. Even the guys who usually don't watch it. They become so involved in the feed world that they don't even focus on what's going on in the real world. To be continued...
Now we can't blame being dependent on anyone really. No one put a gun to our head and said use this cellphone until your brain explodes. But maybe there are people that we should point the finger at. Such as our parents. My parents are always complaining about how much I'm on my cellphone but at the same time they pay for my bill and allow me to use it so what's the problem. Or how they say that we rarely spend any quality time together but when we are together the tv is on. Little things like this affect what I'm going to do with electronics. I think we also put the electronics too much in little kid's faces. For example, my 5 month old brother LOVES cellphones. I don't think he understands what they are but he likes the light and sounds it makes. My family encourages him playing with it by buying him a play phone or flashing their phone in front of him. We also just recently opened his walker and it has a play ipod on it that plays nursery rhymes which he loves. This leads me to my next people I want to blame, the industries that make these things. They push and push their supplies until we fall into their traps. They make us think that the ipod that just came out is better than the one we have even though it works perfectly fine. Last of all, I want to blame ourselves. We continue to give in everytime they come out with something new. We buy it and than advertise it to our friends and family without ever really thinking about if it's really worth what we spent. We let ourselves be fooled by how good it looks on tv or how "cool" we would look if we had it. To be continued...
For the future (if there is one past 2012) what do you think the electronics are going to be like? How much more dependent are we going to be? Will the computers ever crash like they were once suppose to or will robots soon dominate our world? These are all good questions to think about and ponder. To be continued...
On the train we see people constantly using their ipods. While they are walking down the street, they're texting. When kids get home from school, they turn on the tv to see what's on. People are constantly checking their facebook pages and emails. It's a non stop world of digital interaction out there and people have come to really depend on it. Although I have tried to figure out why we are so addicted before I still don't have every possible reason I think. I have talked about boredom, social status or awkwardness, and even being accustomed. But there might still be possibilities out there such as social acceptance, to show economical status, an escape from reality. All of these are good topics to touch on. In the book Feed all of these topics are looked at. Such as boredom. Whenever the kids get bored they start watching stuff on their feed. Or with social status or awkwardness, Violet confesses to Titus that her parents never had feeds when they were younger and how people use to make them feel less of what they really were because they didn't have feeds. They got Violet a feed because they didn't want her to go through the hardships they went through without the feed. The kids being accustomed to the feed is shown when they disconnect them from the feed after the old guy causes them to malfunction. They are so used to it they don't know what to do when they don't have it. And when their friend Loga comes to visit and she still has it they all crowd around her, jealous that she still has her feed. Social acceptance is kind of how Violet's parents get her a feed so that she is not made fun of in school or looked at differently than the rest of the kids. They give into the "feed". The economical status part is when we find out in the book that Violet couldn't afford a feed for a long time. So it shows us that there are still poor people in this world that can't afford the feed. If you do have the feed your obviously up in the financial class and your looked at differently than someone who isn't. The feed is also an escape from reality and they show us that all throughtout the book. Like when Titus is upset and he just starts playing games on the feed to get away from thinking. Or when they are in the hospital and Loga is describing what's happening in that teen soap opera show and they are all so into it. Even the guys who usually don't watch it. They become so involved in the feed world that they don't even focus on what's going on in the real world. To be continued...
Now we can't blame being dependent on anyone really. No one put a gun to our head and said use this cellphone until your brain explodes. But maybe there are people that we should point the finger at. Such as our parents. My parents are always complaining about how much I'm on my cellphone but at the same time they pay for my bill and allow me to use it so what's the problem. Or how they say that we rarely spend any quality time together but when we are together the tv is on. Little things like this affect what I'm going to do with electronics. I think we also put the electronics too much in little kid's faces. For example, my 5 month old brother LOVES cellphones. I don't think he understands what they are but he likes the light and sounds it makes. My family encourages him playing with it by buying him a play phone or flashing their phone in front of him. We also just recently opened his walker and it has a play ipod on it that plays nursery rhymes which he loves. This leads me to my next people I want to blame, the industries that make these things. They push and push their supplies until we fall into their traps. They make us think that the ipod that just came out is better than the one we have even though it works perfectly fine. Last of all, I want to blame ourselves. We continue to give in everytime they come out with something new. We buy it and than advertise it to our friends and family without ever really thinking about if it's really worth what we spent. We let ourselves be fooled by how good it looks on tv or how "cool" we would look if we had it. To be continued...
For the future (if there is one past 2012) what do you think the electronics are going to be like? How much more dependent are we going to be? Will the computers ever crash like they were once suppose to or will robots soon dominate our world? These are all good questions to think about and ponder. To be continued...
Monday, November 2, 2009
Fix Your Outline NOW
Hey Conor,
I think that the way your outline was made is extremely clear and interesting. It makes me want to read more about what you wrote and think deeper of our thesis. The only suggestion I have is to maybe write a little more professional just in case Andy gives a shit. Other than that I think you on good track. I'll be back to your page soon.
Peace out homie g
My little Asian beauty,
I like the ideas your choosing to analyze in your essay. I like how you used different sources and did not just make up everything you said. I'm going to do this for my paper now because it makes it more professional. Another thing I like about your outline is the way you use real life examples such as yourself playing video games or me texting. It helps connect the reader to your paper. I feel like you should concentrate more on how Feed can be connected to your paper (which your probably going to do). Other than that I think it's a good start and I look forward to reading more.
P.S. Your right next to me = D Ily <3
I think that the way your outline was made is extremely clear and interesting. It makes me want to read more about what you wrote and think deeper of our thesis. The only suggestion I have is to maybe write a little more professional just in case Andy gives a shit. Other than that I think you on good track. I'll be back to your page soon.
Peace out homie g
My little Asian beauty,
I like the ideas your choosing to analyze in your essay. I like how you used different sources and did not just make up everything you said. I'm going to do this for my paper now because it makes it more professional. Another thing I like about your outline is the way you use real life examples such as yourself playing video games or me texting. It helps connect the reader to your paper. I feel like you should concentrate more on how Feed can be connected to your paper (which your probably going to do). Other than that I think it's a good start and I look forward to reading more.
P.S. Your right next to me = D Ily <3
The World As We Know It (Outline)
Cellphones, computers, televisions, and ipods are a big part of our lives. Whether we want to admit or not most of us are addicted to some sort of digital stimulation. Now the real questions are why are we so addicted, who made us this way, and what will it be like for future generations. Throughout this paper we will be looking at evidence to try to gain some insight to these questions.
On the train we see people constantly using their ipods. While they are walking down the street, they're texting. When kids get home from school, they turn on the tv to see what's on. People are constantly checking their facebook pages and emails. It's a non stop world of digital interaction out there and people have come to really depend on it. Although I have tried to figure out why we are so addicted before I still don't have every possible reason I think. I have talked about boredom, social status or awkwardness, and even being accustomed. But there might still be possibilities out there such as social acceptance, to show economical status, an escape from reality. All of these are good topics to touch on. To be continued...
Now we can't blame being dependent on anyone really. No one put a gun to our head and said use this cellphone until your brain explodes. But maybe there are people that we should point the finger at. Such as our parents. My parents are always complaining about how much I'm on my cellphone but at the same time they pay for my bill and allow me to use it so what's the problem. Or how they say that we rarely spend any quality time together but when we are together the tv is on. Little things like this affect what I'm going to do with electronics. I think we also put the electronics too much in little kid's faces. For example, my 5 month old brother LOVES cellphones. I don't think he understands what they are but he likes the light and sounds it makes. My family encourages him playing with it by buying him a play phone or flashing their phone in front of him. We also just recently opened his walker and it has a play ipod on it that plays nursery rhymes which he loves. This leads me to my next people I want to blame, the industries that make these things. They push and push their supplies until we fall into their traps. They make us think that the ipod that just came out is better than the one we have even though it works perfectly fine. Last of all, I want to blame ourselves. To be continued...
For the future (if there is one past 2012) what do you think the electronics are going to be like? How much more dependent are we going to be? Will the computers ever crash like they were once suppose to or will robots soon dominate our world? These are all good questions to think about and ponder. To be continued...
On the train we see people constantly using their ipods. While they are walking down the street, they're texting. When kids get home from school, they turn on the tv to see what's on. People are constantly checking their facebook pages and emails. It's a non stop world of digital interaction out there and people have come to really depend on it. Although I have tried to figure out why we are so addicted before I still don't have every possible reason I think. I have talked about boredom, social status or awkwardness, and even being accustomed. But there might still be possibilities out there such as social acceptance, to show economical status, an escape from reality. All of these are good topics to touch on. To be continued...
Now we can't blame being dependent on anyone really. No one put a gun to our head and said use this cellphone until your brain explodes. But maybe there are people that we should point the finger at. Such as our parents. My parents are always complaining about how much I'm on my cellphone but at the same time they pay for my bill and allow me to use it so what's the problem. Or how they say that we rarely spend any quality time together but when we are together the tv is on. Little things like this affect what I'm going to do with electronics. I think we also put the electronics too much in little kid's faces. For example, my 5 month old brother LOVES cellphones. I don't think he understands what they are but he likes the light and sounds it makes. My family encourages him playing with it by buying him a play phone or flashing their phone in front of him. We also just recently opened his walker and it has a play ipod on it that plays nursery rhymes which he loves. This leads me to my next people I want to blame, the industries that make these things. They push and push their supplies until we fall into their traps. They make us think that the ipod that just came out is better than the one we have even though it works perfectly fine. Last of all, I want to blame ourselves. To be continued...
For the future (if there is one past 2012) what do you think the electronics are going to be like? How much more dependent are we going to be? Will the computers ever crash like they were once suppose to or will robots soon dominate our world? These are all good questions to think about and ponder. To be continued...
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